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-spanking is effective in teaching
There are an alternative method. •
There are an alternative method. •
•Spanking in childhood could cause a psychological problems . in adult life
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Ts : some people may argue that spanking is effective in teaching.
E-(R) However spanking creates fear in students and disperses children's attention, also causes psychological problems in the long run.
Cs : Therefore, physical punishment in schools is less effective than the positive ways of dealing with student's errors.
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Some people may argue that spanking could be effective sometimes especially in teaching. However, spanking creates fear in students and disperses children's attention, also causes psychological problems in the long run based on lots of experts studies. There are an alternative methods that give the same results but in more human approach. Nadine Blocks (Executive Director of the center for Effective Discipline an anti-corporal punishment organization) subtract research said that " children who are spanked display aggressive and other antisocial behavior". (How spanking hurts and what to do insted ) by Block. There are about 39 country arround the world that banned the corporal punishment also it is stated now in the international human rights organization that physical punishment classified as an contravention of children's rights. Therefore, physical punishment in schools is less effective than the positive ways of dealing with student's errors .
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Ts : some people may argue that spanking is effective in teaching.
E-(R) However spanking creates fear in students and disperses children's attention, also causes psychological problems in the long run.
Cs : Therefore, physical punishment in schools is less effective than the positive ways of dealing with student's errors.
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CA paragraph
Some people may argue that spanking could be effective sometimes especially in teaching. However, spanking creates fear in students and disperses children's attention, also causes psychological problems in the long run based on lots of experts studies. There are an alternative methods that give the same results but in more human approach. Nadine Blocks (Executive Director of the center for Effective Discipline an anti-corporal punishment organization) subtract research said that " children who are spanked display aggressive and other antisocial behavior". (How spanking hurts and what to do insted ) by Block. There are about 39 country arround the world that banned the corporal punishment also it is stated now in the international human rights organization that physical punishment classified as an contravention of children's rights. Therefore, physical punishment in schools is less effective than the positive ways of dealing with student's errors .
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you might want to consider the following:
"based on (replace lots with many or a large amount of) lots of experts studies.”
There are (no an) an alternative methods that give the same results but (with respect to humanity).
There are about 39 country arround the world that banned the corporal punishment(.) Also, it is stated now in the international human rights organization that physical punishment classified as an contravention of children's rights.
(This sentence should be split into 2 sentences )