Good evening my friends .. so I apologize for the delay but I was busy .. I repeat my apologies
This my nots :
- Severe beatings behavior may destroy the life of a child in the cradle
- Educational beatings permeates the life of every child
- Shame and fear
This my plan:
This my paragraph:
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spanking can be an educational way
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said messenger of Allah ( PBUH ) :" Commend your children to
perform prayer when they seven years old, and beat them for not offering it
when they are ten ... bla "
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Non-painful spanking is an educational method
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This my paragraph:
Spanking can be an educational way.Said messenger of Allah (PBUH): "Commend your children to perform prayer when they seven years old, and beat them for not offering it when they are ten ... bla"Note here that al-Shara gave the child a long time until notification to the Better Business prayer and patience it for seven years, and ordered that the parents do not take the initiative to punishment only when the child insists on not their performance after the age of ten. And the parents adopt this approach in their dealings with their children to be patient and directing them to dialogue with them and leave the punishment to the ultimate .. of the biggest mistakes in education that teaches Son behavior prior to knowing belief, Firm belief is the who teaches behaviour .
Shahad your notes are very good but you need to indicate where did you take them from.
ReplyDeleteA good wide variety of words have been used in this paragraph. However, the point you made in your paragraph is against the main argument here, thus, it should be a CA paragraph.
Said messenger of Allah (PBUH): "Commend your children to perform prayer when they seven years old, and beat them for not offering it when they are ten … bla” (You need to write it in full and omit the “bla”)
You tend to capitalise unnecessary letters in the middle of sentences which should be kept small (lower case). For example, "the biggest mistakes in education that teaches Son behavior prior to knowing belief, Firm belief is the who teaches behaviour.”
"punishment to the ultimate .. of the biggest” (I think there is something missing in this sentence as the two dots were used, try to avoid them!)