In conclusion : there are many ways to raise the child , spanking absolutely not one of them .
Refutation : -you can't prevent child from repeating his mistakes by spanking him
-spanking also cause a physically dangerous
Opening up: the person who use this way to raise his child may be he was raise by this way so that the problem didn't solve ,there are many different ways to punish a child without spanking him for example sitting in the corner without speaking is a kind of punishment
Refutation : -you can't prevent child from repeating his mistakes by spanking him
-spanking also cause a physically dangerous
Opening up: the person who use this way to raise his child may be he was raise by this way so that the problem didn't solve ,there are many different ways to punish a child without spanking him for example sitting in the corner without speaking is a kind of punishment
In conclusion Spanking is the worst and strict way to brought up the child, it's could be supplement to make the child implacable so that make him repeat his mistakes in addition to a mental state, there are several ways instead of spanking sometimes with bereaving him from something he loves or sitting in the corner without speaking, the person who Spanking to raise his child may be he was raise by this way so that the problem didn't solve, any way spanking child for purpose of education is the worst way to brought up .
ReplyDeleteExcellent Lamia! This is a very good and sound conclusion. However, you need to take care of punctuation marks and capitalization. Again, try to avoid linking unrelated sentences with a comma instead of a dot. The whole conclusion is one long sentence. It should be split into 4 or 5 sentences for a clearer structure.
Aviod using "Any way", it is informal and not commnly used in academic writing.